Procedure Essay
Activity : 4
Process : 3
A phone toy is a funny small thing that usually garnishing and hanging in your cell phone. Especially for girl’s cell phone. These are sold in many places but it does not a small cost like the thing. Many shops sell it with expensive cost and bad quality. Why we should buy it with expensive cost if we could make it with a cheap cost? For that reason I want to explain to you how to make a phone toy.
source picture: indonetwork.co.id
Well, we will need some materials to make a phone toy. There are: 2 sheets of flannelettes with different color, a scissors, some cotton, a little glue, a strap hanger about 10 cm, a paper, and pencil or pen.
First, we begin by drawing a picture. You just need to draw anything that you want on the paper. It has a function as guideline for the flannelettes. Then, put the picture on the flannelettes and cut it based on the picture as guideline. It will make the flannelettes formed like the picture.
Second, fuse the two flannelettes. Basting the glue in all side edge of each flannelettes but do not forget to leave a small space to make a hole. The hole will use for entering the cotton into the flannelettes. After that, patch and press them until become fused. Next, enter the cotton into the flannelettes. Then, fuse it again.
Finally, make a small hole to tie the strap to flannelette. After the strap have already attached, the phone toy is already to use. Now you can use a phone toy from your own creation.
It is really easy to make a phone toy with our own creation. The most important is you do not need to buy it with expensive cost because we do not have to buy everything if we can make it by ourselves.

dear Riri_mOet...
BalasHapusIn paragraph one
"A phone toy is a funny small thing that usually garnishing and hanging in your cell phone. Especially for girl’s cell phone"
I think it is good to you to do not add point(.) before especially for girl's but add coma(,).
and then, it is more interesting if you put some pictures in your essay...
heheheheh...
thank you Riri_mOet
haii aulia,,,
BalasHapusin the last paragraph
you write "The most important is you do not need to buy it with expensive cost"
it's better to to change with "The most important is you do not spend much money to buy it"
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au imoet,
BalasHapusI think your essay is very interesting, you can tell how the ways to make a toy cell phone.
It also can make money, right?
and please pay attention with your grammar too .
so far so good .
keep writing :)
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aulia.......
BalasHapusyour essay is good enough,,
i just want to remind you pay attention about grammar,,, and do not use Indonesian
just that,,
Let's improve it!!!
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