My hometown is Pariaman. My hometown is not too far from the capital of West Sumatera, Padang. It takes about one hour from Padang by a car. But if you used public transportation, it may takes about two hours. my hometown Exactly in Lubuk Idai. I am sure that everyone in Padang ever heard Lubuk Idai.
Actually, Lubuk Idai is name of a river which pass in my village. The river has a deep deph and slow current enough in the reachers. When I was a child, I used to swim at the river with my grandmother and my sibling. Now the river’s name is using by a restaurant in Padang which famous with delicious roasted fish. The restaurant is located in Khatib Sulaiman, Padang. Before they opened the restaurant in Padang, they also have one in Pariaman.
Then,not only about Lubuk Idai information. I also want to tell you some information about beautiful beachs in Pariaman. Pariaman has many beautiful beach. Even though in the past Pariaman have known as the longest toilet. Now Pariaman has been changing as a beautiful beachs all along the coast. There are Cermin beach and Ulakan beach.
Cermin beach is an amazing beach. It has a good scenery and white sand. Many people come to enjoy the beach. In Cermin beach, there are many pine trees along the beach. It makes a cool atmosphere in the beach. The beach has many cottage that selling some foods. The food sells are not really expensive.
Then, about five kilometers from Cermin beach, there is located a famous beach in Pariaman. It is called Ulakan beach. People usually come there for a religion funeral. Because thyer is a grave of Syeikh Buhanuddin take place. Everyone there believe that people who visit it in seven times, it has same meaning with pray in Mecca.
As we know, there is one religion funeral in Pariaman which held every 1st Muharram. The funeral calls. Tabuik is made from rattan and contain by fruits or pieces cake. Tabuik is held for commemorate about Hasan and Husein. Hasan and Husein are grandson of Muhammad SAW who pass away by a war.
I think Pariaman has good tourism objects to see, also you can enjoy the beach. Most people in Pariaman are like to visit it every weekend to refreshing their mind or for a religion funeral. It is time for you to visit and enjoy the beautiful view…
Maybe there some small mistake in your essay. the importanta one is about plural and singular naoun.
BalasHapusin pararagraf 3 line 2, you write beachs in there.what does it mean? you should write beach for singular and beaches for plural right ?....
you must to be foccus about it
thks maya...
BalasHapusits a good advice...
i think tour essay is good.
BalasHapusbut,
dont began a pragraph with conjunction word,
like this.
"Then, about five kilometers from Cermin beach"
just it..
ok.
keep writing to be better...^_^
ooh, i see..
BalasHapusthanks for your comment.. :)
Aulia....
BalasHapusActually,I'm agree with Maya..I'm in one opinion with her...
Beside that,in paragraph 4,last sentence you write "the food sells are not really expensive".
According to me it's be better if you write "the cost of the foods are not really expensive".
That's all from me.
Tq.Keep spirit.
:))
i think your essay is good enough...
BalasHapusbut you still hve mistakes in sentence structure and dictions..
so, i think you still need to revise it and still need improvement..
in paragraph 4, I think you can make it into compound sentence because you make simple sentence with many dot....
BalasHapusat all this is good essay,
just keep try to make it more perfect...
i give u sugestion
BalasHapusin paragraph 3, so write "I also want to tell you some information about beautiful beachs in Pariaman."
you should write beaches not beachs
i think that all :)
au,
BalasHapusso far so good .
I like you're essay and I like Pariaman too !hahahaha :D
you can explore you're essay again .
Ok, I think that's all from me .
It's clear everybody :p